Sydney Bushnell
English 326
“Dora” Blog 1
“Dora
Learns to Write and in the Process Encounters Punctuation” Article
Like
any normal first grader, Dora just wants to be able to write to impress her
teacher to show her how well she has done. Also, like most first graders, WHOSE [POSSESSIVE PRONOUN]
teacher helps them with their different problem areas, she seems to be
struggling with how to write proper sentences. With the help of discussion amongst her fellow first graders, multiple
exercises, and guidance from her teacher, she progressively begins to form her
sentences. (Compounded subject)
There
are a number of things that Dora’s teacher does to help her in succeeding in
her writing. DORA’S TEACHER DOES A NUMBER OF THINGS TO HELP HER IN
SUCCEEDING IN HER WRITING. (S-V-O with transitive verb) As Dora progresses, her
teacher tends to strategize on how to help Dora best proceed with her writing.
From the very beginning, Dora’s teacher always has Dora read aloud what she has
written. This helps Dora hear both what she is doing correctly and what
mistakes she might be making. DORA CAN BOTH HEAR
AND SEE
WHAT SHE IS DOING CORRECTLY AND WHAT
MISTAKES SHE IS MAKING BECAUSE OF THIS.(S-V-O with transitive verb) Also, after
Dora has written something, the teacher asks her to compare her own writing to
that in a storybook to see how her writing differs. This gives Dora examples of
how to alter her writing to make it more correct in terms of how it might look.
Another
strategy her teacher uses in helping her is to discuss and ask why she put
periods where she has and how that might be an incorrect placement. DORA’S
TEACHER USES QUESTIONS AND DISCUSSION OF WHY
SHE PLACES PERIODS WHERE SHE DOES AS A STRATEGY TO HELP DORA FIND INCORRECT
PLACEMENTS. (S-V-O with transitive verb) She has Dora read her work as it is
written so that Dora can hear the choppy sound it makes when she puts periods
at the end of phrases. This helped Dora realize that she wasn’t correctly
placing the periods and give her an idea where to correctly place them by how
she wanted her sentences to sound when she read them aloud. BY READING
ALOUD, DORA CAN REALIZE WHEN SHE WASN’T CORRECTLY PLACING PERIODS AND
IT ALSO GIVES HER AN IDEA WHERE TO CORRECTLY PLACE THEM BY HOW SHE WANTED HER
SENTENCES TO SOUND. (S-V-O with transitive verb) Dora became increasingly
better with her writing and when she did something well, the teacher
complimented her on it versus questioning why she did it that way. This gave
Dora confidence rather than confusing her more. COMPLIMENTS GAVE DORA THE
CONFIDENCE IN HER WRITING RATHER THAN CONFUSING HER MORE. (S-V-O with
transitive verb)
Things
that I noticed the teacher didn’t do to help Dora in her writing was to give
Dora the opportunity to ask the teacher questions about why or where she is
supposed to be putting her periods. For example, Dora had been writing and
putting periods at the end of each line and the teacher did not say anything to
Dora about it so she wasn’t sure if she was correctly placing them but she
became more focused on the topic of her stories rather than where the periods
should go. The class listens to the teacher explain how to place periods and
she wants THEIRS
[POSSESSIVE PRONOUN] to reflect hers in that she doesn’t just place periods
after each word. If the teacher points out where they are being placed
incorrectly only some of the time, this might be confusing Dora as to where they
actually should be placed by saying something like “YOURS [POSSESSIVE PRONOUN] show improvement
but if you look at this example you can see the difference in them.”
Reasons
that Dora might be taking so long to grasp the idea of sentence-end-making
could be that the medium she is writing on (a booklet) might lead her to
believe that she should end her writing at the end of the page and before the
next page begins. USING A MEDIUM SUCH AS A WRITING BOOKLET MIGHT LEAD DORA
TO BELIEVE THAT SHE SHOULD END HER WRITING AT THE END OF THE PAGE
AND CAUSING HER TO TAKE LONGER TO GRASP THE
IDEA OF SENTENCE-END-MAKING. (S-V-O with transitive verb) Another issue is
that when we speak aloud, we can’t always hear where pauses, spaces, or periods
are or would be if we were to write out what we were speaking. SPEAKING
ALOUD ALSO CAUSES CONFUSION FOR STUDENTS BECAUSE WE CANNOT ALWAYS HEAR
PAUSES, SPACES, OR PERIODS WHERE THEY SHOULD BE PLACED (This makes it
difficult for children like Dora to transfer from speaking to writing) AND
THIS MAKES IT DIFFICULT FOR WHOMEVER
IS WRITING, LIKE DORA, TO TRANSFER SPEAKING TO WRITING. (S-V-O with transitive
verb and use of “whomever”) As Dora continues in her writing process, she will
begin to develop senses for simple and complex sentences and learn little by
little how to punctuate these sentences. After
being taught helpful strategies from her teacher, Dora now writes, punctuates,
and discusses her writing with her classmates. (Compounded verb)
I think you did a good job on this post! I didn't notice any errors. I really like how you highlighted the possessive pronouns- it makes them pop out more and also keeps them from being mixed in with the patterns for this week.
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job of editing your previous "there is", "this is" etc. sentences without making them sound too awkward. You clearly knew exactly how to switch around the letters to clarify what "this" is. Just make sure you notice that in some of those sentences you use compound subjects and verbs! Good job :)
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